Wednesday, 25 February 2015

8YNE Comma practice 23/2/15

8YNE Punctuation Homework - Commas
Hand in on Tuesday 4th March

Comma practice: Don’t Splice me!
The comma: this little fella is either under-used or over-used in students’ writing, but to obtain a secure level 5 in your writing, you need to use them accurately.
Revision (You know most of this!)
Commas are used:
1.       In lists. At the market I bought wool, biscuits, a screwdriver and a birthday card.
2.       To introduce names. James, you must try harder with your use of commas. Your comma use needs to be improved, James. As I have said before, James, your commas need work.
3.       After a fronted adverbial (we did these recently). Unfortunately, commas were a problem for the class.  Before marking their work, the teacher wanted them to improve their punctuation.
4.       Around additional information. John, the man with the blue car, is really good at using commas. The students, even year eight students, were forgetting how to use commas.
5.       When you are starting a sentence with a subordinate clause. After teaching commas for the hundredth time, the teacher was a little weary. Even though they seem straightforward, commas can be a little tricky.
When not to use a comma:

You must never, ever, not even on a Sunday, use a comma between 2 separate sentences. This is the job of the mighty full-stop, and the comma is not up to the job. Here are some examples of the dreaded comma splice:

1.      I went to the market to buy some wool, it was really busy.
2.      Commas were a real problem, they kept getting them wrong.
3.      He crept up the stairs slowly, he could hear the wind howling outside.
4.      Slowly, she entered the room, everyone was waiting for her.
5.      I went to the medical room, I had hurt my shoulder during Rugby.

How do we fix this?
Mostly, comma splices come about because students are reluctant to use full-stops and/or connectives. Sometimes a semi-colon can be used to fix a comma splice, but we’ll leave those for another time.
TASK:

1. Re-write the sentences above using accurate punctuation. There may be more than one way of fixing it. If you can think of more than one way, write them all down.
E.g.         I went to the market to buy some wool but it was really busy.
I went to the market to buy some wool. It was really busy.

2.  Re-write this paragraph into your books using accurate punctuation.

They walked up to the ancient ruin, it was twilight and the shadows were gathering  fast.  It was very difficult to make out the footpath. That led up to the grand portcullis of the castle.  The rickety drawbridge groaned in the evening wind and swung eerily over the empty moat,  it was tempting to just turn and go home, they did not want to go there but they had no choice, in the castle their host was awaiting them


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